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3/ (Creative) Be the Shepherd!!! and in your own creative poem or prose piece try to be so convincing that no modern “nymph” could possibly refuse you!!!!
Come live with me and be my number One ,
And we will sit for hours in the sun,
Coogee, Bronte and Bondi Beach,
All the places we can reach.
And we will stay in bed until10 o’clock,
And Netflix the whole season of ‘The Block’,
Only when the season ends,
Will we get more sleep again.
And I will make thee gluten free,
Snacks, smoothies and bubble tea ,
Invite some friends over, we’ll have a ball,
Wake up tomorrow to a bunch of missed of calls
Your friends shall dance and sing
We will polish our wedding rings,
And we will sit for hours in the sun,
Come live with me and be my number One.
Eliane Habib 
I really loved this modern take on a classic poem. Riddling the poem with modern references of Netflix and Bondi beach was a great way to entice the modern nymph to your love. The rhythm of your poem was also amazing as it flowed quite well. The only thing I can think of that will enhance your poetry is maybe work on word choice to enhance the rhythm. Many sophisticated poets utilise assonance and other devices to make the way the words are said themselves emulate the ideas they want to portray. This is only minor nitpicking as I truly loved your work.
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Hey El!
This was a fantastic read! I loved your modern Aussie take on the classic poem. I enjoyed your interpretation on the original immensely, I had a go at the same question and it was really refreshing to something produced on the opposite end of the spectrum to what I had envisioned. This is a great piece filled with humour, relatable scenarios and familiar places to a local Sydney-sider.
Your unique take on a classic poem displays the immense possibilities for love and attraction and demonstrates how what may appeal to one, may not necessarily attract all types.
I loved this poem and I wanted to read more! The only critique I could make is that some of your ideas and concepts could be expanded on in greater detail to create a more poetic nature and feel beyond rhyming words.
Other than that minor note (that I’m forced to give) this poem was very enjoyable to read and it leads your audience on a journey that I’m sure many will be enthusiastic to embark on. Thanks El.
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