Peer Review 1: ALEXANDRA NEMATALLA
https://s00240376.wordpress.com/2018/07/24/the-journey-begins
Alexandra.. wow! I absolutely loved your creative writing piece about ‘Kendall’s Beach Kiama’. The descriptive language and imagery used was strong and as a result, draws the attention of the reader — definitely kept me hooked! Through this, it is made clear to me that this place means a lot to you and your experience makes me want to go there.
“My mind is clear as I try to distinguish a pattern in the waves. Monstrous, gentle, heavenly, the waves become unpredictable. The waves unwind the stress in my limbs to become a relaxed mass of being. It is as if my body is immersed in the water, not fighting the waves but letting them shape my movements, my thoughts and spirits.”
These few lines in particular were my favourite. Because of the carefully picked out words and the clear language techniques used in this, stood out to me the most. This also made your piece very engaging and your experience enlightened me more about the beauty of the beach.
However, I felt as if maybe a more ‘casual’ and a more ‘informal’ approach would’ve made your blog a little bit better as it will feel more real and allow the reader to relate more on a deeper level. Other than that, this a very well constructed creative writing piece and you should be very proud of yourself.
Amazing job Alexandra!
Peer Review 2: RACHELLE LANAPPE
https://rachelle358095736.wordpress.com/2018/09/01/week-5-2nd-blog-critical/#more-236
Loved the post Rachelle!
Loved the way you described and your interpretation of Fire’s On by Arthur Streeton. You made me look at the painting in a different light through your choice of words and the language techniques you used. I absolutely loved all your ideas on the natural landscape and the Indigenous people in relation to how they use the land. You did this in a clear and concise way.
Your interpretation was well written, clear, concise, short and straight to the point. Great work, Rachelle!
Peer Review 3: Heidi
This poem is great! I absolutely loved the way you have used repetition as emphasises your point in a clear and concise way. “I’m not a woman fierce, I’m inadequately held.” this line stood out to me the most as it broke the rhyming pattern you had going on throughout your poem. I think this line in particular highlights the modern woman of the need to be independent but also, depending on someone else.
This poem was written beautifully and I loved every bit of it! Keep doing what you’re doing Heidi! It’s great!
Great work Heidi!
PEER REVIEW 4: JULIA ELAZZI
https://juliaelazzi.wordpress.com/2018/09/24/a-tribute-to-miles-franklin/
Julia, I absolutely loved your tribute to Miles Franklin. It was very well written as you addressed her life in an engaging and inspiring way. You really portrayed her life and her work in a great light. I particularly liked how you gave some background of the novel and also drew the focus on how yourself and the other readers may relate.
I don’t see anything wrong with your writing and the language as it is beautifully written in a clear and engaging way. I commend you as you have tackled this blog topic in a truly amazing way. Excited to see what else you’ll write.
Keep on writing !
PEER REVIEW 5: JAMES REYNOLDS
https://jamesdotrblog.wordpress.com/2018/09/25/the-orange-tree/comment-page-1/#comment-38
James, I really enjoyed reading your blog entry on “The Orange Tree” as it was written really well. I particularly liked how you gave a quick summary on the poem itself and then focusing on the final line. Loved how you structured that. Your great understanding of the poem was portrayed clearly through your analysis on the young girl’s perspective and the relation between the girl and the tree. I think this was amazingly written, I don’t see any issues in regard to your grammar.
Great Job James!
Eliane Habib 